Persuasive writing

WALT: For this activity we had to write a persuasive piece of writing to persuade someone. This is mine, I hope you like it! My persuasive writing is to ban smokes! Enjoy.

Persuasive writing: Ban smoking!

Do you know that if someone is pregnant then they start smoking that can harm their baby really
bad?

I personally think that you should ban smoking because it can harm people badly,
such as giving people
cancer, did you know that?
My first reason is because if you smoke your lungs can be very affected from smoking,
Did you know that,
coughs, colds, wheezing, and asthma is just the start that can happen to you if you
smoke?

A fact is that, Smoking can cause fatal diseases such as pneumonia, emphysema
and even lung cancer.
Also another fact is that, Smoking causes 84% of deaths from lung cancer and 83%
of deaths from chronic
obstructive pulmonary disease.

Another one of my reasons is because if you smoke you can damage your brain
and that can equal to death.

If you keep smoking for about a couple weeks or maybe a few months even
some years, you will get lung
cancer or something and you will have about 5% of a chance to live,
so if you don't want to have a very low
percent of chance to die I suggest you don't smoke!

If your wondering why almost every shop has their smokes up to 60-100 dollars?
Well it's because they want
smoking to stop!
It's bad for you and can fairly damage your brain, joints, skin, eyes, gums,
digestive system, lungs, your
heart and etc!

Seriously people don’t smoke! If you love your family tell them to stop persuade them!
You know that they can leave you if you just let them smoke! Try to tell them to stop,
throw out all of those smokes!

Smoking can cause fair damage to your body. I suggest you protect your body, and
your family, friends
, even strangers! It’s sad how many lives get taken away each day.

And this is why I think that you should ban smoking, I understand if you don't
agree with me
but I personally think you should save all those poor lives that go almost every
single day from smoking,
thank you,

Sincerely yours,

Kyah

Persuasive Writing Success Criteria

Highlight if used.

Introduction

• Opening question
• Opinion/Reason

3 Reasons

• Each paragraph is one idea supported with your reasons/facts

Conclusion

• This ties back/recaps back to the introduction

Highlight evidence of linking words.

 I like how in kyahs persuasive piece of writing she seperated her writing into
paragraphs and the
spelling was really good and correct.She also used lots of connecting words that
link up.
Another thing that I liked about it was that she had lots of facts of how smoking
can be bad.
The next step learning could be to link the conclusion a bit more with the
introduction.

Thankyou lily, I sure will follow my next step learning! I do need to still work,
on things like that!
I think ill work on making more reasons and my sentences more detailed!
Thank You lily for your advice!
I will be sure to follow it!